AlexStevens42 (November 30, 1999 at 12:00 am)

no actually, the last sentence of an introductory paragraph is a thesis. At least, that's where your thesis is supposed to go.

cosmith (November 30, 1999 at 12:00 am)

A few things. Stop at your first sentence. That's a thesis. However, please rewrite it. Remove "I interpret", as it weakens your argument. Parables and allegories are not synonymous, please choose one. Next, "while" does not set up the concession needed for the second clause of the sentence. "Although" is a concessive conjunction, and is more appropriate. That's a start. The rest of your comments are a literary and intellectual train wreck. Want to sound smart? Learn to write first.

cosmith (November 30, 1999 at 12:00 am)

A few things. Stop at your first sentence. That's a thesis. However, please rewrite it. Remove "I interpret", as it weakens your argument. Parables and allegories are not synonymous, please choose one. Next, "while" does not set up the concession needed for the second clause of the sentence. "Although" is a concessive conjunction, and is more appropriate. That's a start. The rest of your comments are a literary and intellectual train wreck. Want to sound smart? Learn to write first.

nerdchan (November 30, 1999 at 12:00 am)

LOL. funny, but i love the part where she goes "what the fffff...."

hangingonat60 (November 30, 1999 at 12:00 am)

If both of you recieved equal, truthful MEDIA coverage to begin with your balls would be the same size in the playground. CNN (ESPECIALLY) YELLOW JOURNALISM AT ITS BEST

tweety218721 (November 30, 1999 at 12:00 am)

haha that was cute

VoteRepublican2012 (November 30, 1999 at 12:00 am)

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ashlandlove (November 30, 1999 at 12:00 am)

The little girl is the one with the probllems.

jackieindo33 (November 30, 1999 at 12:00 am)

HAHA THISIS SOOO GOOD!

harbingerv10 (November 30, 1999 at 12:00 am)

well done.......